Monday, March 7, 2011

Would you pick up this book (as an agent)? #3

Special thanks to Galena for reading #2 and giving me feedback. Sign up already so others can learn and appreciate the feedback too! :D

His father once told him that he couldn't outrun fate, but as Lucifer looked around at the planet Earth, his prison for over 200,000 years, he realized that he could certainly hide from fate for a while. Of course, he wasn't intentionally hiding from his succession to King of Chaos; who would want to? His cousin Jehovah and his brother Michael had conspired against him by sending him premonitions of Michael's death. Being a good brother, he had gathered his favored demon legion and some of the most powerful demon wizards in the multiverse and traveled with great haste to avenge his brother.

Unfortunately, Lucifer had no idea that killing Jehovah inside of Jehovah's Order, a universe that his cousin had created in the outskirts of the cosmos, would not only cause Jehovah’s inevitable reincarnation into godhood, but it would also cause a chain reaction that would ultimately kill most of Lucifer's legion. Of the Chaos force that had arrived on Earth, only Lucifer, his brother Sariel, his uncle Batarel, and a few dozen guards now remain.

To complicate matters, Batarel and Sariel, both members of the Council of Wizards, the governing council that restricts magical learning in Chaos, refuse to tell Lucifer anything specific about the primal pattern that Jehovah used to create his universe. As the apocalypse - a powerful celestial armageddon that Lucifer and Batarel set in motion to make sure Jehovah's creation would be isolated and destroyed - closes in on the entrapped demons, none of them know just what the future will bring. In the world's last days, Michael - now reincarnated as an archangel - appears to them and tells his brothers and uncle the dark news: the armageddon will spread Jehovah's Order across the cosmos until it reaches Chaos, where it will destroy their entire families, their way of life, and everything fate had prepared for Lucifer.

Faced with the imminent destruction of the entire Chaos universe, the demons execute a daring escape through the cursed Earth atmosphere that burned up their legion many thousands of years ago and make for Chaos as fast as their wings can carry them. But Jehovah is not the only force in the universe that they have to worry about. It seems that fate has another course set for the Crown Prince of Chaos.

1 comment:

  1. I got name-dropped? My heart is all aflutter!

    Seriously though, I think this summary is quite good! You've got a complex story going on so it's nice that you can break it down in such a way. I assume when you are querying specific agents you would include an intro paragraph introducing yourself and describing a bit why you chose that agent to query, or something like that.