So, I've redrafted the first chapter and have been working closely with my editor throughout the process. I think he has done a fantastic job, but I'm also a bit biased.
To those who have read my old first chapter (or tried to) or any new visitors to the blog, how do you feel about the current pacing, point of view, character development, etc.? Are Derek and I on the right track?
Lucifer's Odyssey - Chapter 1
Showing posts with label Chapters. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Chapters. Show all posts
Saturday, May 7, 2011
Wednesday, March 30, 2011
The Winter Phenomenon (Chapters 2-4)
So, I didn't get any real feedback about posting sample chapters with sex scenes in them, so guess what? You're getting them.
The novels page has been updated with Chapters 2 - 4 of the Winter Phenomenon. I added another 8,000 words today and completed a first draft up to Chapter 10. The story is pretty solid in my mind for the remaining 20,000 words or so, but I'm open to major changes.
So, let me ask you a question.
How do you like your main characters? Alive and well, slightly hurt, or extra crispy?
The novels page has been updated with Chapters 2 - 4 of the Winter Phenomenon. I added another 8,000 words today and completed a first draft up to Chapter 10. The story is pretty solid in my mind for the remaining 20,000 words or so, but I'm open to major changes.
So, let me ask you a question.
How do you like your main characters? Alive and well, slightly hurt, or extra crispy?
Friday, March 25, 2011
Lucifer's Odyssey overhaul
Lucifer's Odyssey has had a bit of a cosmetic facelift, and I couldn't have done it without many of you readers. Some of the comments I had gotten back were that the first and second chapters were too long, and you were right. These chapters are now separated into four total chapters. Similarly, the third chapter has been broken into two chapters.
Along with other chapter splits, Lucifer's Odyssey has expanded from 11 chapters to 17 chapters, which will give readers more resting points and hopefully result in easier reading. But chapter splits are not the only changes that have been done.
Additional comments from readers were that people were getting lost in the description from Chapter 1 and especially Chapter 2. The introductory paragraph in Chapter 2 has been updated to remove the name given to the vortex that was created and instead tries to focus on what happened when the shit really hit the fan.
In addition, some readers have told me that they were having problems following the timeline of when Batarel and Lucifer arrived in Chaos, and I've added a more explicit description which I hope flows naturally at the beginning of Chapter 2. Additional buildup has been added to hopefully explain why the demon revolt was so inevitable as well.
The interrogation of Michael has received changes. When Sariel had noted how closely the captured man looked like his brother, some readers were a bit unnerved by the nonchalance of the reaction, and that's because I hadn't done a good job at describing what was really going on. Hopefully the setup is a bit clearer in Chapter 1 and the flow is enhanced.
I've expanded the Novels section here on the blog to include the first five chapters instead of the first three. If you would like to sample later chapters, send me a message at rexjameson@gmail.com.
Along with other chapter splits, Lucifer's Odyssey has expanded from 11 chapters to 17 chapters, which will give readers more resting points and hopefully result in easier reading. But chapter splits are not the only changes that have been done.
Additional comments from readers were that people were getting lost in the description from Chapter 1 and especially Chapter 2. The introductory paragraph in Chapter 2 has been updated to remove the name given to the vortex that was created and instead tries to focus on what happened when the shit really hit the fan.
In addition, some readers have told me that they were having problems following the timeline of when Batarel and Lucifer arrived in Chaos, and I've added a more explicit description which I hope flows naturally at the beginning of Chapter 2. Additional buildup has been added to hopefully explain why the demon revolt was so inevitable as well.
The interrogation of Michael has received changes. When Sariel had noted how closely the captured man looked like his brother, some readers were a bit unnerved by the nonchalance of the reaction, and that's because I hadn't done a good job at describing what was really going on. Hopefully the setup is a bit clearer in Chapter 1 and the flow is enhanced.
I've expanded the Novels section here on the blog to include the first five chapters instead of the first three. If you would like to sample later chapters, send me a message at rexjameson@gmail.com.
Friday, March 18, 2011
And you thought Winter was coming to an end
Well, you were wrong. Tonight, I revised the first chapter of The Winter Phenomenon, which will likely be my second book.
The Winter Phenomenon is similar to Lucifer's Odyssey in a few key ways. First, there is magic, and we're once again following a person that others in the story would consider a bad guy. But while you could easily argue, after reading Lucifer's Odyssey, that Lucifer was simply Jehovah's nemesis, the same is not the case for The Winter Phenomenon. In Lucifer's Odyssey, if you are rooting for Jehovah, then Lucifer simply has to be your bad guy; Lucifer is the guy on the other side.
Alex Winter, however, is a bad guy. He's the great-great grandson of the Butcher of Lyons, and people have been out to kill him since he was only a baby. Every one of his family members has been killed off by the time he was five, he was forced to live on the streets and in orphanages, and the experience has left him deeply scarred.
Not wanting to die like his sister, defenseless in the streets, Alex trains to be a duelist under a different name, and then at the age of 15, he begins killing the most celebrated wizards and witches of the era, live, in front of all of Nagusia - the capitol of the magical world. Today, I debut the first chapter of The Winter Phenomenon.
The Winter Phenomenon - Chapter 1
It's full of plenty of flaws and who knows how it will look tomorrow, but feel free to take a look. The chapter will be permanently available in the Novels page, along with other chapters from other works. As always, feel free to post your comments. Happy reading!
The Winter Phenomenon is similar to Lucifer's Odyssey in a few key ways. First, there is magic, and we're once again following a person that others in the story would consider a bad guy. But while you could easily argue, after reading Lucifer's Odyssey, that Lucifer was simply Jehovah's nemesis, the same is not the case for The Winter Phenomenon. In Lucifer's Odyssey, if you are rooting for Jehovah, then Lucifer simply has to be your bad guy; Lucifer is the guy on the other side.
Alex Winter, however, is a bad guy. He's the great-great grandson of the Butcher of Lyons, and people have been out to kill him since he was only a baby. Every one of his family members has been killed off by the time he was five, he was forced to live on the streets and in orphanages, and the experience has left him deeply scarred.
Not wanting to die like his sister, defenseless in the streets, Alex trains to be a duelist under a different name, and then at the age of 15, he begins killing the most celebrated wizards and witches of the era, live, in front of all of Nagusia - the capitol of the magical world. Today, I debut the first chapter of The Winter Phenomenon.
The Winter Phenomenon - Chapter 1
It's full of plenty of flaws and who knows how it will look tomorrow, but feel free to take a look. The chapter will be permanently available in the Novels page, along with other chapters from other works. As always, feel free to post your comments. Happy reading!
Friday, March 11, 2011
Lucifer's Odyssey - Chapter 1 (Revised)
I woke up at 2 a.m. with an idea in my head for the bar scene. I tossed around in bed for an hour or so, and my brain just kept going and going about Chapter 1 and some of the comments that you guys had given me.
There's some preamble that I should mention here. Chapter 1 used to be large enough to choke a horse. One day, I decided it was all terrible, and so I erased the entire chapter and started over. Twenty some odd pages was more manageable, but there were a lot of ideas that went away with the revision.
That being said, the explanations for what the demons were doing on Earth, how they got there, what they did when they got there, etc. were lost on the chopping block. I felt it was time to address them once again. The result is that Chapter 1 is up to thirty pages - nowhere near as full as it used to be but still hefty and hopefully better.
For those that gave comments or just want an introduction to Lucifer's Odyssey, please feel free to check out the newly revised Chapter 1 below. Comments are always welcome - even if it's just to say that I've managed to ruin your faith in authors or something :D.
Lucifer's Odyssey - Chapter 1
Happy reading!
There's some preamble that I should mention here. Chapter 1 used to be large enough to choke a horse. One day, I decided it was all terrible, and so I erased the entire chapter and started over. Twenty some odd pages was more manageable, but there were a lot of ideas that went away with the revision.
That being said, the explanations for what the demons were doing on Earth, how they got there, what they did when they got there, etc. were lost on the chopping block. I felt it was time to address them once again. The result is that Chapter 1 is up to thirty pages - nowhere near as full as it used to be but still hefty and hopefully better.
For those that gave comments or just want an introduction to Lucifer's Odyssey, please feel free to check out the newly revised Chapter 1 below. Comments are always welcome - even if it's just to say that I've managed to ruin your faith in authors or something :D.
Lucifer's Odyssey - Chapter 1
Happy reading!
Thursday, March 10, 2011
Lucifer's Odyssey Chapter 3
I've gotten some great feedback from Galena, Ketzl, and Suva! I'll definitely want to look into the bar scene in Chapter 1 and try to flesh that scene out a bit more. Thanks alot! You are all awesome! Feel free to leave comments on this thread so you don't feel so alone in critiquing the chapter. Believe me, the harsher you are on me, the better it is in the long run. Or... maybe I'm just a masochist. Anyway, Chapter 3!
Chapter 3
Lucifer and Sariel sit in a time-dilated pocket vortex, trying to figure out their next moves. Going back to Chaos would be a death wish but returning to Earth doesn't sit well with Lucifer either, and not just because the person trying to destroy his home universe has a power base there. Lucifer and Sariel's brother Michael mentioned an old conflict - one that Lucifer and Sariel have always regretted. After a year of discussion, the brothers decide to visit an old friend.
Happy reading! And if it's not happy reading, be sure to let me know that it needs work. The more information you can give me about what let you down, the better chances I have of making it right!
Sunday, March 6, 2011
Lucifer's Odyssey Chapter 2
In this chapter, Batarel informs the Council of Jehovah's wrath, and Lucifer returns back home to the cold arms of an angry mob. Meanwhile, wily Sariel does his best to avoid the popular wrath that is threatening to supplant the Chaos royal family. From being imprisoned on a planet called Earth to an even smaller jail cell in Chaos, the frustrations and anger of the Crown Prince are at their peak, and he seeks to unleash them on a powerful target in a rival clan - one who seeks Lucifer's throne.
Lucifer's Odyssey Chapter 2
Lucifer's Odyssey Chapter 2
Wednesday, March 2, 2011
Lucifer's Odyssey Chapter 1
As a preview of things to come in this blog, I've included the current intended book cover and first chapter of my book Lucifer's Odyssey. As this is my first book, I have many pitfalls that I am falling into, but maybe they are worth overlooking. You be the judge!
In the coming weeks, I'll probably release the current first chapter of The Winter Phenomenon also and discuss other ideas that are currently on the table.
Lucifer's Odyssey Chapter 1 and Book Cover (Updated 3/6)
In the coming weeks, I'll probably release the current first chapter of The Winter Phenomenon also and discuss other ideas that are currently on the table.
Lucifer's Odyssey Chapter 1 and Book Cover (Updated 3/6)
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